Introductory Paragraph - The Outcome

We have learned in the class before on how to write a good introductory paragraph. As we know there are 7 types of introductory paragraph. Below are some examples that I took from other groups and compiled it together as my reference.

1) PERSONAL EXAMPLES

     Almost every night, she would go “clubbing“at the nightspots in Jalan Bukit Bintang and Sultan Ismail, Kuala Lumpur's golden triangle, looking for fun and "extra cash". With her black skin-tight miniskirts with a revealing top, she easily draws attention from the males as soon as she walks into any of these nightspots. The 21 years-old girl, Amy comes from a state in the east coast of West Malaysia. She started as a sales promoter at a shopping centre in the city, but her monthly salary of RM800 is hardly enough for her to survive in KL. To make matters worse, she has to send home approximately RM200 a month for her parents and 5 siblings who are still schooling. It is hard for her since the burden of the family is at her hand. Her family is depending on her (The hook). Amy now lives in a dark situation where she is happy outside not in inside (The transition). There are factors that can cause someone to become a prostitute such as lack of attention from the parents, money problem and negative peers influence (Thesis statement).

2) QUOTATIONS 

     “Vandalism comes naturally from our soul.” These words come from a teenage boy and his friends who lax in drawing graffiti on the wall of a building. Teenage boys said that this work is a piece of art where they often did this to express their feelings or thoughts about certain things in our life. Furthermore, he said that they also draw the graffiti whenever they feel like doing it. This type of vandalism also does not only involve teenagers but also adults (The hook).  However, these teens do not know that they have vandalized the image of the building as well as the environment (The transition). Vandalism can be prevented if the government creates a law that severely restricts vandals in destroying the environment, giving motivational talk as well as giving punishment by doing community service (Thesis statement)

3) FACTS AND STATISTICS

     Prior to the 1980’s, predatory animals were rare sights in rural areas in Malaysia. Even in wilderness areas, bears, tigers, and other predatory animals were rarely being spotted.  As far as this concern, people that were attacks with these kinds of animals are not always the friendly animals.  Between 1989 and 1995 there have been 14 tigers attack peoples.  In one attack, a rubber tapper was killed in his rubber farm near Negeri Sembilan.  Attacks by bears and alligators are also increasing during this period of year (The hook). This statistics shows that there is an increasing of wild animal attacks (The transition). The reasons why these animal attacks peoples are because there are hungry feel threatened and try to protect their young (The thesis statement).

4) RHETORICAL QUESTION

     Racism is one of the world’s major issues today. Do you aware of how much racism still exists in our school, work forces, and anywhere social lives? Racism very much exists and it is about time that people need to start thinking about the solutions to this matter. Can we achieve One Malaysia’s mission with this kind of mind set? Think about it (The hook). Many people believe that it depends on if a person was brought into the world as a racist or not but that is not the case at all. In fact, an individual cannot be born a racist but only learn to become one asthey grow from child to adulthood (The transition). Basic causes, mainstream, institutions, government, anti racism group, and even some hidden event in Malaysia’s past or a few of the possible solutions to racism (The thesis statement ).

5) CURRENT EVENTS

     According to New Straits Times, the latest case was a dead baby girl found floating in a sewage tank behind a girls' college hostel in remote Kelantan two days ago. The decomposed body was found by a group of boys playing nearby. Two more abandoned baby cases were reported that day in Malacca and Kuala Lumpur (The hook). This situation can be caused by many factors which surround us (The transition). Thus, baby dumping is caused by negative social relationship, peer pressure, modern technology and lack of knowledge in individual self. (The thesis statement)

6) CONTRAST TO THE THESIS STATEMENT

     Have you heard that being skinny is the ‘it’ thing. Across the globe, teenagers are starving themselves to be skinny. The models force themselves to be skinny and look great. They will do anything such as taking pills and drugs so that they will not gain any weight. Why is this so? Well look around you, the media feeds us constant image of skinny public figure, portraying the fact that being skinny is beautiful. To be fat is a sin (The hook). But is it worth to taking pills and drugs in order to maintain your beautiful figure. Is this an appropriate diet technique? (The transition). As a matter of fact, the major impact of engaging in extreme diet is nutrition deficiency, diseases and mental problems (The thesis statement).

7) DEFINITION

          Streptococcus pneumonia, pneumococcal is the most common cause of bacterial meningitis in adults, children, and dogs and it is one the top two isolates found in ear infection. It is more common in the very young and the very old person. It can also be distinguished  based on its sensitivity to lysis by bile. The bacterium Streptococcus pneumonia is a common cause of secondary pneumonia following heart disease, diabetes, or weakened immune systems such as from HIV (The Hook). Nowadays, this infection was spread up towards the world (The Transition). According to this infection, it can caused distress as they need more money for the statement, being embarrassment to the other person and reducing self-esteem (The Thesis Statement)